A place a visitor to my country should not miss is the Southeast State of Bahia, the region that the fleet led by Pedro Alvares Cabral arrived in 1500, marking the discovery of Brazil. It was one of the most economically important colonies in the period of Portuguese rule and its capital, Salvador, was the first capital of Brazil. Consequently, Bahia has a rich cultural history, which includes historic buildings, crafts, literature and arts. It is also the Brazilian state where Catholic and African traditions blended the most, giving birth to a rich culture. Futhermore, it is known as the "Land of Happiness" because of its happy people and festive events that will keep tourists entertained throughout the year. Finally, Bahia is a land of incredible natural beauty. It has a beautiful coastline, the largest in Brazil, and it has the Chapada Diamantina and the Reconcavo, regions of the state that represents its remarkable geographic and climatic features.
I noticed some points which you can make it more simple and smooth to read.
ReplyDelete1sentence:,the region → where
5sentence:which includes ~ → with ~
9sentence:in Blazil,and it has~ → in Brazil, and the Chapada~
:,regions of the state that represents → which represent its~
Olá Carolina
ReplyDeleteHere are my notes.
1 sentences "... State of Bahía, the region".. I will write: ..State of Bahía, Brazil. The Region fleet .."
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ReplyDelete[Bahia has a rich cultural history, which includes historic buildings, crafts, literature and arts.] In this sentecne 'which includes' is not appropriate. you had better pull out that or write another 'like'.
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